My dog saved my life救命犬

李全忠

作者坐轮椅和自己的狗出去散步，在回程中突发事故，作者的轮椅翻倒并滚下路堤，掉进了泥水里，作者右腿受伤，摔倒在地……

1 It was the 9th of January， a day I will remember for along time. It was a normal Sunday morning around 8：30 am，right on time for Sammys morning walk. I didnt walk becauseof my lameness， so I rode in my power wheelchair. We got outthe door and made our way towards a property near my apartmentcomplex. We got to the gate and out of the complex， andwe went left onto the extra wide sidewalk. It was about a mileswalk one way， passing a firehouse on the right side of the road，before we turned around and started back.

2 Along the path we took was a large plate over the sidewalk. I passed over it the firsttime without any problems. My wheelchair could reach up to 8 miles per hour， but we wenta little slower on our walks， around 2 miles per hour， so Sammy could keep up. Even so，this speed was pretty fast for a 15yearolddog.

3 As we turned around and made our way back， I passed over the sidewalk plate againexcept that this time it was moved without me realizing it， putting my wheelchair in thegrass on the embankment （路堤）. The next thing I knew， my wheelchair started to tip over，throwing me out of the chair and rolling down the embankment into the muddy water below.

4 My right leg was hurt， and I was unable to pull myself upright. I was too weak togather my strength to call for help. The muddy water was cold and I felt it hard to breathewith my body folded and twisted in a strange position. Meanwhile， Sammy was sitting up onthe sidewalk with his leash （链条） caught under the tipped over wheelchair. I heard him barking louder than ever heard. He knew that I was hurt and was in danger.

5 By the way my wheelchair tipped over， a passerbyon the street would not be able tosee it from the road. All anyone could see was a dog barking on the sidewalk almost nightacross the street near the firehouse.

Reading Check

閱读上面的短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。

注意：

1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右；

2. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好。

Paragraph 1：

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Paragraph 2：

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寫作导引

一、语篇研读

（一）基本要素

（二）主题探索

What is the text about？ And what does the author want to tell us？

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二、续写布局

根据续写第一段段首句的内容“我能看出来萨米是想帮我”可知，续写第一段可描写萨米想尽办法寻求帮助。具体内容我们可根据以下问题链来展开：

1. What did Sammy feel and what did he do？

2. How did I feel and what did I do？

3. What is the result？

根据续写第二段段首句的内容“三个消防员终于来帮助我的狗了”可知，续写第二段可描写“我”和狗被救的过程。具体内容我们可根据以下问题链来展开：

1. Where did the firemen do？

2. How did Sammy feel？

3. What lesson did I learn from this experience？

续写线索：狗叫—寻求帮助—被消防人员发现—被救—感悟

三、语言学习

（一）词块

（二）句式

1. 并列句

My right leg was hurt， and I was unable to pull myself upright. （Para. 4）

The muddy water was cold and I felt it hard to breathe with my body folded and twisted in a strange position. （Para. 4）

2. 宾语从句

He knew that I was hurt and was in danger. （Para. 4）

3. 状语从句

It was about a miles walk one way， passing a firehouse on the right side of the road，before we turned around and started back. （Para. 1）

As we turned around and made our way back， I passed over the sidewalk plate again except that this time it was moved without me realizing it， putting my wheelchair in the grass on the embankment. （Para. 3）

4. 定語从句

All anyone could see was a dog barking on the sidewalk almost night across the street near the firehouse. （Para. 5）

（三）即学即用

1. 设法常常表扬你的孩子，这样你就会发现他们乐意向你敞开心扉。（使用并列句）

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2. 他说你太小了，还不明白这件事，他被要求不告诉你。（使用宾语从句）

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3. 昨天离开学校之前，我们打扫了教室。（使用状语从句）

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4. 对于我的孩子们的未来，我唯一希望的就是他们能够健康又快乐地成长，并最终成为他们想要成为的人。（使用定语从句）

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四、续写技能

（一）读后续写三大原则

1. 原文一致原则

内容要前后衔接，上下连贯，语言表达风格一致。

2. 正能量原则（结局性）

故事内容一定要有正能量，故事的结局是美满的。如：迷路了，但最终一定回到了家；失败了或遇到困难了，但最终一定成功了；吵架了，但最后一定是言归于好，和睦相处；犯错了，最后一定会改过自新，重新做人；贼逃了，最后一定是绳之以法；等等。

3. 曲折性原则（过程性）

故事都是跌宕起伏的，其中的人物会遇到困难或问题，但最终能解决。

（二）读后续写四个步骤

1. 读懂大意，理清脉络

主要是根据记叙文的六要素弄清文章大意，特别要弄清故事的人物、时态（通常是一般过去时）、事件（故事的起因和经过）、语言特色（以便在续写时保持语言特色前后一致）等。

2. 细读首句，构思框架

两段首句定一框：由续写的第一段首句与第二段首句确定第一段的框架。二框二首正能量：第二段的框架由第二段首句与正能量结尾来确定。

3. 增加细节，开始写作

在已定框架范围内，依据情节发展和生活常识，推断故事中人物的所见、所闻、所思、所说、所做等，给每段增加5～8个具体细节，我们称之为“五八细节添加法”。

4. 修改润色，整洁誊写

审读初稿，注意语义是否衔接，前后是否连贯，事件是否符合逻辑，语言特色是否与前文一致。在修改润色之后，整齐工整地誊写在答卷上。