2019年12月大学英语四、六级作文试题评析（二）

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四 级

Directions：

For this part， you are allowed 30 minutes to write a letter to a foreign friend who wants to learn Chinese. Please recommend a city to him. You should write at least 120 words but no more than 180 words.

2019年12月的大学英语四级考试的三道作文题目要求考生给一位外国朋友写一封信，本题要求向外国朋友推荐一个学习汉语的城市。大学英语四、六级考试的书信只需包括三个部分：称呼、正文、署名。由于这是一封写给朋友的私人信函，称呼可以直呼其名。比如，我们假设这位外国朋友名叫Alex，称呼就可以写Dear Alex。

这封书信的正文可以写成三个段落。第一段交代写这封信的目的——向对方推荐一个学习汉语的城市。第二段首先建议朋友到北京学习汉语，然后陈述理由。为了使作文的字数达到规定要求，我们可以从三个方面详述理由。首先，北京有许多一流高校，是中国的文化中心，在北京学习汉语可以深入了解中国文化。其次，普通话以北京语音为标准音，在北京可以学到纯正的汉语发音。最后，除了园林和博物馆之外，北京还有许多历史古迹可以参观，在北京不会感到无聊。第三段是一些客套话，如希望自己的建议对朋友有用，请他早日回信，期待在北京见到他等。这些客套话能让书信显得有礼貌，是英文书信中不可或缺的一部分。

正文下面是署名。署名一般写在信纸的中间偏右的位置，分两行书写，上下对齐。由于这是一封写给朋友的信，上一行可写Yours truly（或Truly yours），下一行写你的名字，如Li Ming。下面请看参考范文：

Dear Alex，

It was very nice to hear from you again. You asked me to recommend a city for you to study Chinese in. Im now writing to make some suggestions.

Id like to recommend Beijing， the capital city of China. Home to a number of the countrys most prestigious universities， it is the cultural centre of China. You can therefore gain an insight into the Chinese culture studying in Beijing. Also， residents here speak a dialect of Mandarin Chinese which forms the basis of Standard Chinese. A perfect language environment， isnt it？ Additionally， apart from gardens and museums， the city boasts a lot of historical sites. You will never feel bored， for there is always somewhere to go.

I hope my advice is helpful to you. Please reply soon. I am looking forward to seeing you in Beijing.

Yours truly，Li Ming （143 words）

語言亮点借鉴：

1. Home to a number of the countrys most prestigious universities， it is the cultural centre of China. 北京有许多中国最具声誉的大学，是中国的文化中心。be home to（某地）有，如：California is home to many vineyards.加州有许多葡萄园。

2. You can therefore gain an insight into the Chinese culture studying in Beijing. 因而，在北京学习，你可以深入地了解中国文化。gain / get / have an insight into，深入了解。

3. Additionally， apart from gardens and museums， the city boasts a lot of historical sites. 此外，除了园林和博物馆，北京还拥有许多历史古迹。apart from，“除了……之外，还……”。boast，有（值得自豪的东西）。

六      级

Directions：

For this part， you are allowed 30 minutes to write an essay on the importance of having a sense of community responsibility. You should write at least 150 words but no more than 200 words.

本题要求考生论述具有社区责任感的重要性。我们在下笔写这篇作文之前要仔细审题。在本题中，community的意思是all the people living in a specific locality。因此，它所指的范围比society小。我们居住的小区、就读的学校、工作的单位、生活的城市都可以看作是一个community。所以在论述具有社区责任感的重要性时，我们要更加侧重于对自己周边的人的责任。

本文宜写成三个段落。第一段给社区责任感下一个通俗的定义，让读者知道本文论述的对象是什么。简单地说，社区责任感就是一个人认识到自己对所生活地区的其他人负有责任和义务。第二段论述具有社区责任感的重要意义。论述可以从两个方面展开：第一，具有社区责任感，我们就会通过慈善捐助或者做志愿者工作使世界变得更加美好，小小的善举可以改变这个世界。第二，社区责任感会增加我们自己的幸福感。俗话说，“授人玫瑰，手有余香”。比如，做志愿者工作会让我们减少压力、结识同道、忘掉自己的烦恼，从而感觉更加幸福。第三段先总结全文，指出强烈的社区责任感能改善世界并增加我们的幸福感，然后建议开展一场宣传活动，在全社会提倡社区责任感。下面请看参考范文：

A sense of community responsibility refers to an awareness of ones obligations towards other members of his or her community. It is of special importance in a world that is far from perfect.

Why is a sense of community responsibility so important？ The answer is quite simple. Inspired by a sense of community responsibility， you can make the world a better place， whether by donating to charities or by becoming a volunteer. Any little act of kindness can make a big difference. Whats more， a sense of community responsibility boosts your happiness. Just as fragrance lingers in the hand that gives roses， volunteering in the community helps you reduce stress， meet like-minded people and take your mind off your own worries. Research has identified a link between volunteering and an increased sense of happiness.

A strong sense of community responsibility contributes to the betterment of the world and an increased feeling of well-being. It is therefore advised that a campaign be launched to encourage a sense of community responsibility in our society. （172 words）

語言亮点借鉴：

1. Just as fragrance lingers in the hand that gives roses， volunteering in the community helps you reduce stress， meet like-minded people and take your mind off your own worries. 正如授人玫瑰，手有余香，做志愿工作有助于你减少压力、结识同道并忘掉自己的烦恼。take ones mind off，使某人忘掉。

2. Research has identified a link between volunteering and an increased sense of happiness.研究发现，做志愿工作能增加幸福感。

3. A strong sense of community responsibility contributes to the betterment of the world and an increased feeling of well-being.强烈的社区责任感有助于改善世界并增加幸福感。a feeling / sense of well-being幸福感。

4. It is therefore advised that a campaign be launched to encourage a sense of community responsibility in our society. 因此建议开展一场运动，以便在社会上鼓励社区责任感。“it is advised that… ”“建议……”。这是一个提建议的常用句型，后面的从句用虚拟语气。        □